For your shot make sure there is some movement in the whole body when he is speaking, I like the way you are handling some of the head movements however I think that it can be trimmed because his head jerks around quite a bit. It might actually work better to just keep the accent on "chances" and maybe hold it a bit longer before he looks away again and get rid of all the head jerks in the beginning. His right arm looks stiff and the fist hand position feels awkward. For the hand/arm resting on his left leg the shoulder may need to be brought down a bit because the arm feels to be at too much of an angle for him to be resting the weight. Also on that hand the accent on chances could either be slowed or toned back, it distracts a bit.
The there seems to be a downward jerky feeling on the weight release/shift in the beginning on ID say (most likely COG),feels like she jolts into the position too quickly. This might be a blocking thing but the gun freezes in space on her breath. On her breath the eyes are doing something strange like the are being sucked into her head. It might have something to do with how high her eye-line is on the part previous I think she looks a little too upward. On the part where she takes a breath the right corner of her mouth goes in too far, it makes the transition into the smile feel weird if it was toned down it might fix it. Rest looks like mostly polishing stuff!
I think the hand bit was a good choice, at the end maybe have his fingers open slightly feels a little stiff. There is an eye popping thing right before SO. On the part where he says "telling" right before there is a mouth shape that feels like an F (think its supposed to be m for me) then a one frame transition into the pointy lower lip shape. There are a few other spots where his lips shoot out a little too far like on "chance" his lower lip is rolled out a bit too much. At the end if he has a bit more of a smirk and his eyebrow was up in an arch a bit more it might convey his character a bit more.
If anyone can crit my shot that would be great. I am in the last stages of blocking ready to start overlapping, any suggestions on timing/poses/weight would be great.
Kuan,
ReplyDeleteFor your shot make sure there is some movement in the whole body when he is speaking, I like the way you are handling some of the head movements however I think that it can be trimmed because his head jerks around quite a bit. It might actually work better to just keep the accent on "chances" and maybe hold it a bit longer before he looks away again and get rid of all the head jerks in the beginning. His right arm looks stiff and the fist hand position feels awkward. For the hand/arm resting on his left leg the shoulder may need to be brought down a bit because the arm feels to be at too much of an angle for him to be resting the weight. Also on that hand the accent on chances could either be slowed or toned back, it distracts a bit.
Mr Rudy,
ReplyDeleteThe there seems to be a downward jerky feeling on the weight release/shift in the beginning on ID say (most likely COG),feels like she jolts into the position too quickly. This might be a blocking thing but the gun freezes in space on her breath. On her breath the eyes are doing something strange like the are being sucked into her head. It might have something to do with how high her eye-line is on the part previous I think she looks a little too upward. On the part where she takes a breath the right corner of her mouth goes in too far, it makes the transition into the smile feel weird if it was toned down it might fix it. Rest looks like mostly polishing stuff!
Chris,
ReplyDeleteI think the hand bit was a good choice, at the end maybe have his fingers open slightly feels a little stiff. There is an eye popping thing right before SO. On the part where he says "telling" right before there is a mouth shape that feels like an F (think its supposed to be m for me) then a one frame transition into the pointy lower lip shape. There are a few other spots where his lips shoot out a little too far like on "chance" his lower lip is rolled out a bit too much. At the end if he has a bit more of a smirk and his eyebrow was up in an arch a bit more it might convey his character a bit more.
If anyone can crit my shot that would be great. I am in the last stages of blocking ready to start overlapping, any suggestions on timing/poses/weight would be great.
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