I think her posture should be more hunched over to make her feel older, also the weight shifting doesn't feel right on the cog especially right before she says marriage and at the part where she says old age. There is also some jumps going on the old age and marriage part that I feel don't connect up kinda feels she is lifting before she is taking a step. For her non drink hand I think that motion should happen slightly sooner and be a little slower. On the part where she says marriage I think it would be better to keep the head lower and drag it then sort of swoop it up and say "MARRIAGE!" so that she sort of leads with her head on that bit. I think that would create a nice contrast in actions rather then right left right hand gestures.
When it's not being used on the "old age" the non-drink arm is in an awkward position and after the "old age" movement it returns to the exact same position. I'd suggest doing something more interesting and natural with the arm and having it's resting position after the motion be different than before it. Also, there's a good portion of time where she is looking down and we cannot see her eyes. Though it's fine to have her look down, you'd engage the viewer more effectively by not losing track of her eyes for too long. You could just decrease the tilt down a little bit so we can still see them, or perhaps find some other solution.
I think her posture should be more hunched over to make her feel older, also the weight shifting doesn't feel right on the cog especially right before she says marriage and at the part where she says old age. There is also some jumps going on the old age and marriage part that I feel don't connect up kinda feels she is lifting before she is taking a step. For her non drink hand I think that motion should happen slightly sooner and be a little slower. On the part where she says marriage I think it would be better to keep the head lower and drag it then sort of swoop it up and say "MARRIAGE!" so that she sort of leads with her head on that bit. I think that would create a nice contrast in actions rather then right left right hand gestures.
ReplyDeleteWhen it's not being used on the "old age" the non-drink arm is in an awkward position and after the "old age" movement it returns to the exact same position. I'd suggest doing something more interesting and natural with the arm and having it's resting position after the motion be different than before it. Also, there's a good portion of time where she is looking down and we cannot see her eyes. Though it's fine to have her look down, you'd engage the viewer more effectively by not losing track of her eyes for too long. You could just decrease the tilt down a little bit so we can still see them, or perhaps find some other solution.
ReplyDeleteAwesome Thanks guys!
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